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2020.9.26雅思大作文分析+范文（20年雅思名师金长麟分析）

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写作预测命中情况

今天小作文线图，正如金老师所说的，一周多场考试线图高概率出现，预测课讲解命中！
大作文科技类如期而至，预测题库和预测课都有提醒和讲解，公益预测命中类别。
金老师写作精讲班命中几乎原题。

2020.9.17雅思大作文原题

Anybody can use a mobile phone to answer the work and personal calls at any time or 7 days a week. Does this development have more positive or negative effects on both individuals and society?

金长麟雅思写作解析

这个题目科技类母体，讨论手机使用利弊，同时也是2010年10月9号考试原题。本周预测题库和预测课都命中类别，精讲命中几乎原题。

这个题目大家如果直接套题写手机使用利弊还是不算非常合适。

普遍来讲手机使用的弊端一般有社交类：使人们沟通疏远并占据大量沟通时间和社交生活；健康类：辐射问题；隐私类：监听和个人信息泄露问题。

但今天这个题目的反方可能更多是从个人社交生活和个人生活被打扰的部分来讲。正方比较简单，可以从个人事务和工作事务在手机可以随时随地使用的条件下获得的好处分项分析。

Personal affairs

Mobile phones have revolutionized the way we communicate. It made simplified and more convenient for our lives. The mobile phone performs its role as an essential social tool, as one can stay in touch with family, friends, and colleagues much more straightforward than did the generations before.

Business affairs

A mobile phone is often considered essential equipment in the working environment. It increases workers' productivity by allowing work effectively to their schedules, and it saves time.

The mobile phone has opened the boundaries of a country to make business easier. For example, now we can directly communicate with business users to get a detailed description of requirements on the phone.

对社交生活和日常生活的弊端

A mobile phone can take away your social life. A person with a mobile phone cannot draw the line between work and leisure. Excessive use may result in family neglect. When a person is continuously glued to their electronic device, he pays little attention to the things around him. It leads to limit the family interaction.

参考范文

（来自网络，可以借鉴观点思路不能使用原段落）

Rising ownership of mobile phones facilitates interaction for work and personal purposes, regardless of time constraint. This revolution in communications exerts several benefits on individuals and society, but I believe its demerits overshadow these merits.

As argued, the possibility of answering work-related or personal calls at any time is of immense benefit. Firstly, this practice strengthens people-to-people bonds as it is more convenient and speedier to stay in touch irrespective of geographical barriers. For instance, international students can give their parents back home a call to ask after their health, which means the feeling of loneliness or homesickness is somewhat relieved, keeping them attached emotionally.

Secondly, society can benefit from the diminished demand for public or private transport besides work productivity achieved. Staff, for example, can communicate with their line manager or clients without frequent face-to-face meetings as everything can be accomplished with a brief telephone conversation. The roads then could be less congested, and the traffic flow will be smooth.

I believe that the detrimental effects of the availability of mobile phones all the time overweight its positive ones. The first repercussion is its undesirable ability to manipulate owners and deprive them of personal freedom and privacy. At night, their co-workers can happen to contact them for work-related discussions; hence, they are inevitably swept into the maelstrom of work.

This development is also attributed to the loss of a sense of community. Rather than communicating face-to-face with peers at school or colleagues in the same office, they rivet their ears onto their phones and isolate themselves from the real life. For example, sitting together in a coffee shop, two friends may fail to talk to each other because they are all preoccupied with answering their calls.

In conclusion, albeit advantageous to some extent, that people can make and receive calls every time makes them isolated. I firmly believe that those adverse effects are more acute than the positive ones.