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2020.9.17雅思大作文分析+范文（20年雅思名师金长麟分析）

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9月（雅思换题月）的第三周的考试，大/小作文均命中！！！
9月17日雅思小作文线图命中
9月17日雅思大作文环境类讨论命中

2020.9.17雅思大作文原题

The unlimited use of cars may cause many problems. What are those problems? To reduce the problems, should we discourage people from using car？

金长麟解析

今天的雅思考试没有在写作上为难大家，环境类考察和report文体，都是大部分考生有话说并且不太容易跑题的文章结构。

考试前一天的晚上写作预测分析小范围讲解课上讲了线图，9月17号就考察了线图，同时课上特地讲到了环境类别会有可能在9月份出现，分析了飞机大量使用带来环境污染问题，今天考察了汽车使用带来环境污染问题，本周的预测全面命中！

这个题目非常简单，正方段落问无限制的使用汽车或者汽车使用量激增会导致什么样的问题，那么从环境上无非是两个基本点：

首先大量汽车的使用或者汽车数量的激增情况下，如果城市的规划建设不能够做出匹配的应对，就会导致交通拥堵，降低人们的生活效率。

其次，目前大部分的汽车都使用的是fossil fuel，汽车的排放的废气会加剧空气污染，从而严重降低人们的生活质量。

反方问了一个模棱两可的问题，说为了解决这个问题我们是否应当鼓励人们较少使用汽车。

第1个部分，我们回答说应当鼓励，这是因为如果汽车数量减少，拥堵自然会得到缓解，而且废气的排放量会急剧下降，对管制空气污染有着积极作用。

但是转念一想，我们也可以回答不鼓励使用汽车很大程度得降低了人们生活的便利，所以从根本上解决，我们应该是更良好的规划城市，并且积极的研发推广绿色能源的使用，才能从根本上依靠科技的进步来解决环境的问题而保障民众得到的便利。

参考范文

（来自网络，只可借鉴观点和逻辑论述方法，不能使用原词句）

It can be undeniable that a range of urban areas has come from an increasing number of cars use. Although reducing the private cars is an immediately efficient way, it is unrealistic to expect people to give up car vehicle in favor of mass transit since it is still their main means of transport to work or travel.

There is no doubt that private vehicles are major problems of air pollution, exhaust emission in urban. The smoke emission from the car has made air quality unpleasant and sometimes dangerous to our health like lung cancer or heart disease. Moreover, traffic jam is another serious problem which causes huge numbers of accident casualties every year. As a result of these problems, the concentration of vehicle brought about concern of humans to the environment .

To solve these problems, some people suggest that the government should encourage people to reduce dependence of use car. However, I think that tackling the concern about car should entirely emphasize human instead of vehicles. One solution that has been put forward is a long-term solution for habits using public transport instead of the private vehicle so that the car journeys are not necessary. Consequences, not only would it save energy and cut carbon dioxide emission, it would also enhance the quality of life.

In conclusion, the role of the private car is not entirely replaceable soon, but its effect to global change is easy to consider. In my opinion, while discouraging car use might seem a quick solution to the problem the human is facing, it is mostly unlikely to be a permanent cure.