2020.9.5雅思大作文分析+范文（金长麟解析）

2020.9.5雅思大作文原题

Today there is a great increase in anti-social behavior and lack of respect to others. What are the causes of this? What measures can be taken to reduce this problem？

【金长麟解析】

老题重现，超老的题目，2010年1月30号原题，10年来没有再考到这个题目。近期老题频出，之前都是15-19的题目，现在又把年限向前推进了！本周预测特别预警了社会类，题库第六题分析对老人不尊重，这个题目考察对他人不尊重。

本议论文的问题对于多数雅思考生来说稍显困难。困难之一来自于考生对 “anti-society behavior”的不了解。尽管antisocial 的字面意思是‘反社会’，但实际上，antisocial 并不是指犯罪行为，根据维基百科的解释，antisocial的定义是：不体谅他人，可能引起社会危害的行为，不论有意无意。因此实际上是与a lack of respect to others差不多的意思，所以文章不应该将antisocial与违法犯罪等同起来，这是需要注意的一点。

为了比较全面的论述这个问题，antisocial大致可以从以下几个方面来考虑：

一、家庭的教育；

二、学校的教育；

三、社会，文化的影响（成年人）。

大家也可以从现在的teenage身上看看实际的“反社会”行为的例子。比方说“非主流”的打扮、对于学习的厌恶、青少年犯罪、离婚家庭中子女的暴力表现和自暴自弃的表现、对男女关系处理方便的任性随便等等，例子数不胜数。

如果不理解什么是“反社会”行为，则这篇文章很难入手。对他人的不尊重也可以谈到社会快速发展产生代沟，年轻人对老人由于不理解从而不尊重的现象。论证过程中可以列举部分“反社会”行为。第二点困难则来自于考生对这些“反社会”行为的成因和解决方式找不到合适的语汇来表达。

而关于解决措施，则可以对应地这么来说：一、家庭是最关键的因素，充满关爱的家庭通常会培养出有爱心有同情心的孩子，而受到虐待，歧视或压抑的孩子更加容易对社会产生敌意，冷漠或戒备；二、学校需要重视学生的心理健康，而不仅关心学生的学业；三、求助心理咨询或医生；四，诉诸法律。

【参考范文】

范文来自网络仅可参考观点和段落行文方式

考官评分6.5分范文

Nowadays, the issue of anti-social behaviour and lack of respect for others is not uncommon. This is especially true among young people. There are mainly two causes of this phenomenon--the negative influence of mass media and the decline of the family and poverty.

As the mass media become increasingly commercialized, program producers and publishers of books are more focused on ratings, which is clearly associated with profits. Therefore, violence of all kinds is presented on TV and in books. The constant exposure to violence is to suggest people that violence is an ordinary way of life, and that shooting and cheating are possible ways to succeed. We also notice that our societies and even our families have become less cohesive, as people have to struggle to cope with the challenges of life. The decline in our sense of community and family has gone hand-in-hand with the rise of individualism. People increasingly look after their own interests without considering the needs of society.

Accordingly, it is the government's responsibility to introduce restrictions and supervision on the mass media, i.e. not allowing certain TV programs at given times, or by limiting the number of books published according to their content. Families and schools also play equally important role in dealing with this problem. Parental guidance is a key factor of self-cultivation in one's lifetime. Parents can spend more time staying with their children and patiently carry out the duty of family education. For children who exhibit some anti-social behaviour, schools should help them to realize what they did is wrong rather than giving up on them.

In conclusion, although the problem of anti-social behaviour and lack of respect for others seem to be inevitable, we must recognize its negative effects on the society as a whole and work on effective measures to diminish its adverse influences.

6.5的范文的内容和质量上来看，语法和词汇功底较好。词汇和句式的使用上均有可圈可点之处。然而在谈论这些行为的成因和解决方法上，文章显得过于笼统和泛泛而谈，因为缺乏适当的实例而使得本来较好的语法和词汇功底显得有些spoiled。尤其是在第二个段落，文章有一点点将“反社会”行为片面的理解为“暴力行为”。

考官评分7分范文

The undesirable phenomenon that an increasing number of people tend to behave like antisocialists with little respect to others is actually a result of mixed reasons.

Chief among the causes of this trend is the poverty-stricken life as well as the unfulfilled ambition, which are due to the deficiency of resources themselves and the unfairness of society. Consequently, tortured by the long-term impoverishment and frustration, these citizens are apt to transform the pessimistic motion into the accumulating complaints and dissatisfactions towards society.

Another contributing factor lies in the apathy and numbness of our society, which has a detrimental effect on intercommunication. The situation is deteriorating with those civilians who pursuit profits and money blindly, which might lead to the ignorance and disrespect to others. In most cases, the citizens in question are probably treated in this way for a period of time, let alone showing respect to other people.

It is, therefore, imperative for measures to be taken to reserve this trend. On one hand, the citizens ought to strive to improve their own lives by mastering a specific skill. In addition, those who fail to fulfill the ambition are supposed to get a clear perspective of what they are hoping to do and how to achieve it instead of endless blaming. On the other hand, it is the responsibility of the authority to narrow the gap between the rich and the poor. Furthermore, the government is obligated to give financial support to the construction of spiritual life of common people.

To conclude, there is certain inevitability in this problem owing to civilians’ terrible living condition and the defects of society, however, it is hoped that the joint efforts from the citizens and the government can be of positive effects.

7分范文总的来说十分不错，对于高级词汇和复杂句式的把握也是恰如其分的，但是在个别细节处还是要注意避免句式重复的问题。此外不应该将antisocial与违法犯罪等同起来，这是需要注意的一点。